Really sad, but nicely written! Some suggesstions:

In the first stanza you put whisperers. I think that should be whispers.

In the third stanza you put my life are. It should be my life is.

But you wrote this beautifully and I could almost feel your pain. Good job and keep up the great work!

Good work. it's sad, but well written.

Left alone in my dark corner, helpless
Counting minutes until the dark being would appear
A knife in one hand, a letter in another
Death passionately whispers in my ear

VERY good opening here, lots of emotion, draws the reader in looking for more.

overall a good read. good rhythm, good style, good word choice. 5/5

Wow that was brilliant. The rythem is a bit off but the rhyming makes up for that.

"Death passionately whispers in my ear"
^^ I love this line, it is so powerful using the simplist of words!

"The fee is blood, from my deepest veins"
^^ The same with this one!

This is a beautiful poem. You did a great job!! 5/5
~Stefanie

I believe this is a story.
Just wanted to say.
Lol.

It's okay.
I'm not very fond of suicide poems,
So I can't say this is great.

It's kind of a bit graphic.
I don't know if you intended it to be that.

ahahah.
Sorry, I guess I'm not the right person to comment on this.

But still, just to keep your 5.
I'll give you that.

You repeated the word "blood" too many times through the poem which, along with the repetition of the word "puny" disturbed the flow a bit. Also, you should add more punctuation through the whole poem which wold create better rhythm and flow. Other than those critiques, I really liked this poem. It is powerful and haunting, written with an amount of overwhelming emotions which I could really feel while I was reading this. Overall, truly nicely done. Your descriptions are intense and memorable.

Your words reflected the soul that has only hope through death, you captured my attention from start to end and that is something hard to do.
keep writing.....

A knife in one hand, a letter in another
Death passionately whispers in my ear
--creates an image

Leaving all my memories behind
Eternal rest is what I truly need
Those beings cause this puny death
After hours, open veins continue to bleed
---very relatable situation

great flow
very sad poem, good write

Woww... This poem is very well-written... Rather spine chilling, but portrays strong emotions... :)

5/5 from me!
Keep It Up! =).