Nice job

5/5

Wow this was a deep poem and one i liked, i also liked your unusual format that had organization in it 5/5 ^^

Mmm let me se these are very strong feelings, dear, :)
but i hope you berak it down structure wise,
mean put it in paragraohs and work some ryhming for it ,

but else you are very talented in the feleigns adn flow point of view