The Pounding and Flutters

by eehcuhhhz   May 15, 2008


As the sun and their quarrel submerges,
Man and woman go on their separate ways.
Regretting the time they had spent together,
Only to learn their love has been a phase.

For a while even, they were married.
Quite a painful matrimony it had been.
Although there were some good times,
Their love and promises did not win.

They listened to their pounding hearts,
Only to have their logic drowned away.
A lovely lesson that needs to be learned,
Before it causes more hearts' dismay.

Feeling they only needed one another,
Everyone else had their bridges burned.
A mistake it was from the very beginning,
Sooner the lovers should have learned.

Yet they did not want to see the mistake,
One that cost them some time to perceive;
That the pounding in their chests were lies,
And the flutters were there to deceive.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    This title truly caught my attention and made me eager to read your poem. I loved how you opened it because it was enticing and clear to understand what was going on. The imagery was great and you truly put me in the scene you created.

    Oh boy did I love the ending. It was heartbreakingly beautiful to read of a love that turned out not to be real. Thats a scary thought to have and you described it flawlessly.

    Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    I liked the poem. The topic of two falling in love and than discovering it doesn't work can relate to many. This poem is written in a very good structure, with decent rhymes and good choosing of words, simple but passionable. Liked it all the way through 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    This is a really good poem....I liked the meaning and you used descriptive words..Great Job

  • 16 years ago

    by Illusion

    The choice of words that you have made is an eye catcher.
    also it evenly captures the daily mishaps / quarrels amongst a couple.

    very well written .
    i dint find any corrections as such.
    also thanks for your inputs.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I can really relate to this well written poem. It in fact seems strange that my fate was recorded so well by an inspired poet

    The stucture as well as the flow and rhyme scheme is just outstanding

    I am going to vote it into the weekly contest

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