This poem is true, but i think it could be better, as in re worded more better, probably longer? i just dont really feel it has a great sense of what a poem should have in it... to me there is no spark - but i cant say what you are expressioning isnt true

Mmmmm u have a great idea in this!! Just readin it makes me feel special!! If i could Id give it a 10/10!!! =)