That one special guy

by xxTaegan Emilyxx   May 16, 2008


I wanted just one guy,
to show he's not the same,
As every other player,
with the same hurtful game.

Just one guy to show me,
Things others don't,
To treat me in a way,
That other guys won't.

To hold me when i cry,
and wipe away my tear,
To assure me when I'm afraid,
to take away my fear.

To be the one and only reason,
for the smile upon my face,
to kiss me so sweetly,
that my heart starts to race.

You don't wipe away my tears,
because now i don't cry,
Because i found you,
That one special guy.

I don't have any fears,
because in your arms i lay,
any thing that scared me once,
has now gone away.

I never quite imagined,
that guy could've been you,
That when you said you liked me,
your words were actually true.

You are that one guy,
that actually made me see,
That what your looking for,
is really just me.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    The flow was off in a couple places and there are too many I's and filler words. In some parts it seems your rhyming was forced. It was a piece I am sure will be liked though as many can relate to it.

  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    Great job. Thia poem was really cute and hopeful if you know what I mean. I think a lot of girls can relate to this. Rhyming was good as well as the flow. 5./5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is the kind of cute poem that has a nice balance on seemingly happy feelings in it
    The bliss of romantic desire simply expressed

    Good work

  • 16 years ago

    by eehcuhhhz

    I thought the poem was pretty cliche.
    It's just the words you chose.
    You could've made it more exciting.
    More... something.

    Like hurtful game.
    Yeah, we've heard love's hurtful.
    You don't have to repeat it, y'know?

    You can use more details.
    Don't use the same words over and over.
    Crying.
    My soul flowing out my eyes.

    I don't know.
    I know that's lame.
    But pout your own spin in it :]

    I'm want to give this a three.
    It deserves a three.
    But I don't want to mean.

    I'll put in a five.

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    I enjoyed this read and feel it was a stroy well told.
    Just ideas as I read:
    line 8 "that" to "those"
    line 19 "because" to "now that"
    line 26 "could've been" to could be"
    Last stanza too many "that"s, they disrupt the rhythm.
    As always these are just my opinion.

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