Comments : Eating me alive

  • 16 years ago

    by SuicideNotes2Poems

    Awwww..... i hate seing this, if you are really doing and going through this,.... i dont know, you shouldnt be fealing like this.
    good way to let your fealings out though.
    keep it up. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a hard hitting poem about a serious eating disorder The merging of the the title with the poem climaxed with the last line for me. You are very skillful at making your point

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    You take the scale and throw it
    You know in your heart that 67 is unhealthy
    But the weight you aiming for is 0
    --very relatable

    like your style of writing
    good job

  • 16 years ago

    by eehcuhhhz

    Erm...
    I agree with tasteless on this.

    "Bitter"
    You can change that to..
    Resentment, or something.

    There were a lot of "you's" in here.

    You spelled "Clothes" wrong.

    This is more like a story than a poem.
    The rhythm was off, too.

    Your words, didn't sound "lovely"
    They seemed... well, undetailed.

    I'm sorry :[

  • 16 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Good write...very well described...

    "The numbers go up
    40, 50, 60, 67
    The number stops
    At 67
    You feel anger welling up inside of you"..

    ^^ i liked this stanza... i think its very creative ... the way you have stuctured it is good...

    keep writing..

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very powerful write. You created great flow and rhythm in every stanza which made the whole poem even more effective. I like the fact that it seems that you're referring to the person who reads this which left great impression on me. The last line is fantastic conclusion to this piece.