by A F May 16, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Date written: May 16, 2oo8 |
by Lonely Rider
I like this type of short poetry... though I haven't tried triolet yet... |
I've written triolets before so I know about the form and I think that you did really great job with it. You should change "&&" to "and" or at least "&" it would look better. Other than that, I really liked this piece. It flows good and you expressed your emotions well. Whole piece doesn't sound forced which is great, it sounds really personal, like it's written straight from the heart yet I believe that a lot of people can relate to it. You did great job with repetitive lines, too. |
Short, But I understand the meaning, and I loved it |
by Baby Rainbow
Great work xx well done xx |