Lovely poem, great rythms but maybe keep things a bit more orignal with the rythms but other than that great poem, and flowed very nicely, it was a soulful poem and very nice use of words despite some rythms, otherwise enjoyable to read, witha bitterswee ending,

tara
(oh and by the way do you think you could rate and comment on some poems of mine, i saw your formus post)

Wow wat a sad poem. but very well written!

<3 sunshine

Wow,this was a twisted story, it was unique so i liked it alot
5/5