Running in Slow Motion; I Came Just a Little Too Late

by BrokenREALiTy   May 18, 2008


Words can't even begin to explain how I feel right now,
(You can tell, because I just started out with a cliche)
I honestly tried for us--I know, it's my fault we ended,
But I'm not the one that decided to play with fire.

(Rip my heart out, and place it where yours is,
Then maybe you'll comprehend just how deadly the sight,
Of you holding hands with another girl was)

Once, you've made me lose sight of what I wanted,
And twice I've lost you because of fear.
So, here's to you, baby, for destroying what was left of us;
For with the sweetest memories, came the hope I never wanted,
(Now look how far it's gotten me)
���©20080518 Mindy Huang

**I'm venting again. I had so much to say, but no words could come out -- so yes, this piece is crap, but just work with me here, okay? My friends wouldn't respect my emotions--they wouldn't listen, so I'm open to constructive criticism, but just, don't tell me anything like, "You need to get over him" and blah blah.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    (Rip my heart out, and place it where yours is,
    Then maybe you'll comprehend just how deadly the sight,
    Of you holding hands with another girl was)
    ^^^
    I feel your pain in this part. Gosh if only it were possible ~sighs~ to have another (one who broke a heart) to feel the beats of pain they left us with..... Sorry I seem to have my own vent today also .... lol

    I like the emotion you have behind this. It's like a tonne of words want .... to come out .... but the pain of though just lingers to deeply.

    It was different but I tend to like uniqueness.
    I can't offer any constructive criticism because I feel that these thoughts and feelings you expressed have fallen in the place they were meant to be.
    I can feel your pain and sadness weep through your words.

    Excellent expression!
    Luanne

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