(Rip my heart out, and place it where yours is,
Then maybe you'll comprehend just how deadly the sight,
Of you holding hands with another girl was)
^^^
I feel your pain in this part. Gosh if only it were possible ~sighs~ to have another (one who broke a heart) to feel the beats of pain they left us with..... Sorry I seem to have my own vent today also .... lol

I like the emotion you have behind this. It's like a tonne of words want .... to come out .... but the pain of though just lingers to deeply.

It was different but I tend to like uniqueness.
I can't offer any constructive criticism because I feel that these thoughts and feelings you expressed have fallen in the place they were meant to be.
I can feel your pain and sadness weep through your words.

Excellent expression!
Luanne