Awww this so sad, good job though. :)

This is long, yet meaningful...Beautiful Job 5*5

A tad inconsistent with capitalization.

I'm sure you did this on purpose to make a point, but I don't think the repetition with the waisted time did much for the poem.

I felt this poem should have been written little different. When I read it and went back to type something so I didn't forget, when I came back I had a hard time finding where I left off because a lot of the lines seemed like they were just saying the same thing. Try put in a little variety in your poem and you should improve greatly. :)