by Sheep
Very good and very true, i like your style, short ans sweet. very to the point. |
Very short and to the point. I did not find myself wading through a sea of words to catch the emotion in this whiskey lala-by |
by H E Losey
Good write! I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme you used in the first two stanzas and would have liked to see it continue into the last, not that what you did is bad just what I would have liked. I think your metre is right on. I would insert appostrophies in the "I'll"s, but I'm picky. |