Comments : I've Got A Little Too Much Captain In Me

  • 16 years ago

    by Sheep

    Very good and very true, i like your style, short ans sweet. very to the point.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Very short and to the point. I did not find myself wading through a sea of words to catch the emotion in this whiskey lala-by
    very well written

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Good write! I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme you used in the first two stanzas and would have liked to see it continue into the last, not that what you did is bad just what I would have liked. I think your metre is right on. I would insert appostrophies in the "I'll"s, but I'm picky.
    A nice story of losing the girl for the bottle.