Just a bad start

by Mark   May 19, 2008


An alcoholic starts his life in the park
by choosing out a bench
here he stays while the day gets dark
starts loosing his common sense

it's not his fault, he just had no chance
to prove that he can be
a better man with a kindly heart
the man we do not see

some people just got bad from start
why do we have to blame
to blame the man who had no choice
and dying cause of shame

so think again next time you pass
an alcoholic on a bench
don't look at him with selfish eyes
try use your common sense...

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  • 16 years ago

    by nobody truly knows me

    I liked this poem. i live with an alcoholic, so i know how that is. i liked how you started and ended it. good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Wow, this was a very different poem. It really makes you think differently about alcoholics. I do think you could maybe go into more detail about why he had to become and alcoholic. It's a little vague, but it's still good how it is. I also like how you did the first and last stanza.. It's like the alcoholic's life starts and ends on that bench. This was really great.

    so think again next time you pass
    an alcoholic on a bench
    don't look at him with selfish eyes
    try use your common sense...
    ^^In the last line I -think- it should be "try using your common sense...". If it's not sorry. >< Haha. Anyways, this was a great write. Very original. Great job, Mark! :]

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

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