Heroes of the Dawn

by eehcuhhhz   May 19, 2008


**Another Interpretation from Loveless**

Man and woman lay upon the floor,
With only one intention in mind.
Kisses flutter extendedly,
As their hearts laced and intertwined.

With their self-respect missing
And their bodies quite exposed,
Numbers fly within their minds,
Trying to get themselves composed.

They'll hate their deeds in the morning;
For impulsive loving is their action.
An oldened bliss rises within them,
For brash doting is satisfaction.

Foolhardiness will bring them misfortune;
For their acts goes against regulation.
Although it is a modern way to feel,
Creators scorn upon their temptation.

A sudden gloom arises within,
Knowing the end of their bliss is nigh.
Yet the thought quickly vanishes
As the lovers let out a booming cry.

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Loveless [Act II]
There is no hate, only joy
For you are beloved by the goddess
Hero of the dawn, Healer of worlds

Dreams of the morrow hath the shattered soul
Pride is lost
Wings stripped away, the end is nigh

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  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew

    Nice poem, greatly written and very expressive. Like you choice of words and they way you play around with them to generate a good piece. Nice vocabulary too. Keep up

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Although I am not familiar with 'Loveless' this piece stands alone.

    You have painted a charming piece about a one off night of passion spent, but at the same time you managed to retain some mystery too!

    Michael

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    I loved this one it is so beautiful great job well written

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Truly interesting piece, you pulled me in with the first stanza and kept my attention through the whole poem with vivid descriptions.

    I read all your interpretation of the "Loveless" and this is not my favorite one but I still liked it. There are a lot of emotions that flow through every stanza which is great and memorable. Also, you managed to create very good rhythm through the piece along with captivating flow.

    The only thing I don't like is the ending line (but that is just my opinion). I think that this piece needs more powerful ending, a memorable statement to represent the conclusion of the story within a poem.

    Overall, truly well written piece.

  • 16 years ago

    by Ash

    Amazing poem and an interesting interpretation. Your choice of words really helps in the imagery within this poem - if one can say that.

    "Foolhardiness will bring them misfortune;
    For their acts goes against regulation.
    Although it is a modern way to feel,
    Creators scorn upon their temptation."

    ^^ My favourite stanza from the entire poem. It just brings across this poem so nicley and adds this touch of beauty to the entire compostition.

    Excellent work. 5/5

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