by MERCY is never shown May 19, 2008
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Why do you judge her |
by Dark Secrets
Nicely written... I like the way you moved on to show your perspective on this topic. Lableing people is the worst type of discrimination in society today, it is true what you say, we are always afraid of people seeing us with the "inappropriate" crowd, when we are only afraid because we feel and think that way and expect everyone to think the same way. great point you got there and I hope we all get rid of this habbit and can be able to live normally. I also like the way you ended the poem, emotion is always what convinces people and reaches their hearts. |
Interesting. It is a very good tone and theme throughout, and I am quite happy with it, it flows quite natuarally. The only thing I would recommend would be to maybe gather your thoughts more, be a bit more focused, you seem to waiver here and there. Overall, very well done. |
I'm impressed with the idea of this, it kind of reminds me of the song "Hero" by Superchick.. not quite the same, but it's alike in a way. Nicely done. |
by Midnight Sun
I think this piece had great potential and I can't wait to see how you tie it all back to the title. It's definately a great piece for imagry as well...not in the traditional sense by using symbolism to create pictures, but you definately picture the scenes and people you're talking about. You've done a great job and it's not even done yet! :) 5/5 for sure for a work in progress. Keep it up! |