Just You And Me (564) [[CONTEST]]

"I see you walk towards her
A smile upon your face
The wind blows up your hair
My heart begins to race.

You look so gorgeous with that smile
And the wind blowing up your hair
I don't see how you don't realize
How much I truly care."

That to me was a lil repetative but I'm not hating ;) (Blowing up your hair)

"I know you have 20-20 vision
And a heart of pure gold
But I don't see how you don't see
How much love this heart does hold."

That has to be my favorite stanza.The irony of being able to see well yet not see what's in front of you is surprising.Nice !

"I've been stressing out these days
Wishing you would notice me
But... it's like I'm invisible...
I don't know why you don't see...

I've been falling backwards lately
Trying to stay firm on my feet
I've been trying to stay balanced
As I slowly become so weak."

So sad to think such thoughts about ones self.You have a good way of letting people know how you feel.

"You saw me as I was once before
But... it's like you don't care anymore
If it were my choice, I'd give up right now
Because you don't understand why or how...

I honestly thought you were the one,
But I guess that I was wrong
Whatever I was feeling was stupid,
Childish, delusional... and so strong..."

So much emotion here as well.It let's me know what your thinking and relate as well in many ways.

"I can't believe I fell for you,
Because... I know you'll never love me
Even if I wished... with all of my shattered heart
Even if I caught... every fallen star...

I know that I can only ever dream
For things that aren't as they truly seem,
I dream of you, I dream of me
I dream of just you and me..."

The way you word your poetry is great.The flow was wonderful and the idea so sad.Hope you write many more as well as this in the future. ;)

With simple words and imagination you created a piece which people can easily relate with, another lonely poem flowing gracefully in every reader's thought.

Very touching poem. Can feel the emotions in your words.

You look so gorgeous with that smile
And the wind blowing up your hair
I don't see how you don't realize
How much I truly care

It is so hard to love someone and them not even know. You see them and they look right past. Young love :)
Good job!
Take Care Cindy