Comments : Your Eyes Are Dancing Across My Skin Like Wildfire.

  • 16 years ago

    by TheRevelation

    "I can feel your eyes dancing across my skin,
    and I can feel the wildfire like burn beneath it all.
    [I know I messed up. I know that I was wrong.]"
    -Great introduction! The only thing that sounded a little off to me is, "wildfire like burn beneath it all." It sounded slightly constricted, probably just to me.

    "I stand here against this white wall and I seem to blend in quite well, I must say. Cause' this world is walking right past and they won't give me the time of day. And my feet are slipping and my lips aren't communicating, I don't know what to do. [I'm nothing without you.]"
    - I love this how the world is in color yet you are in white, and no one is noticing you because you feel as if it is because you lost someone and are nothing now. Beautiful.

    "But the truth is: I miss you. God, I miss you. And when I feel your eyes dancing across my skin like wildfire, I burn. I burn with guilt, and an unexplainable fear that I can't get out. But I need you to know one thing... you saved me and even though I'm a white wall to you now, you still save me"
    -The love expression of this blew me away. The need for someone who you thought would always be there and to you will always be there in some form. 5/5!