Nightfall(Lantern)

Such a shame you can't center align it. Simple and effective but I don't understand how toy count firefly as 3 syllables.

I count 'fire' as a single syllable. But then again, if you do count it as 2, then 'quiet' should also be considered 2 syllables thus rendering 'quietly passes by' 5 syllables instead of 4.

I like the first lantern better than the other two due to the subtle alliteration. Commendable work!

I love the form it sounds so cool and seems natural (unlike some forms). plus i cant help liking any poem that uses "firefly" i mean what a brilliant little word!

Very cute! I did not know this form, so thanks for sharing!

Take care,

Ingrid

I liked it .
what made you write this poem .
the topic you have chosen is new different and the whole thought of expanding your topic is great one.
5/5

This is beautiful. This is a form I have never tried. You did a wonderful job.

City
lights blink
underneath
shaded starry
sky

Great imagery in your words. Lets the reader imagine the city lights under the starry skies.

swift
glowing
firefly
quietly passes
by

I love the vision of the firefly.

Birds
chirp sweet
lullaby,
sway to world of
dreams.

Great ending. Closing your eyes to sleep.
Wonderful job!
Take Care Cindy