Comments : Nightfall(Lantern)

  • 16 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    Its lovely that there r more than 100 types of Existing poetic forms both Existing and created...

    N it's always a learning process for fellow writers over here when poem u just wrote here brings to us one of the form...

    Fantastic poem n amazing work of words..

    Keep it up./..

    best wishz... karan

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Lovely, with remarkable imagery. I've never tried to write a Lantern before but you certainly inspired me to try. Your descriptions are captivating and very beautiful, I could picture the whole poem clearly in my thoughts which took me to a wonderful poetical journey. Excellently written poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    This is beautiful. This is a form I have never tried. You did a wonderful job.

    City
    lights blink
    underneath
    shaded starry
    sky

    Great imagery in your words. Lets the reader imagine the city lights under the starry skies.

    swift
    glowing
    firefly
    quietly passes
    by

    I love the vision of the firefly.

    Birds
    chirp sweet
    lullaby,
    sway to world of
    dreams.

    Great ending. Closing your eyes to sleep.
    Wonderful job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Illusion

    I liked it .
    what made you write this poem .
    the topic you have chosen is new different and the whole thought of expanding your topic is great one.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Very cute! I did not know this form, so thanks for sharing!

    Take care,

    Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    I love the form it sounds so cool and seems natural (unlike some forms). plus i cant help liking any poem that uses "firefly" i mean what a brilliant little word!

  • 15 years ago

    by bhaskaryya

    Such a shame you can't center align it. Simple and effective but I don't understand how toy count firefly as 3 syllables.

    I count 'fire' as a single syllable. But then again, if you do count it as 2, then 'quiet' should also be considered 2 syllables thus rendering 'quietly passes by' 5 syllables instead of 4.

    I like the first lantern better than the other two due to the subtle alliteration. Commendable work!