I Swear.

Wow Steph , I am excited to read a simple title from you . Yay . I need a good read right about now . So lets go ahead and get started . .

First stanza : I must say you blew me away already with the first sentence . The rolled up jeans and wrinkled shirt says a lot for a girl . Lol . And I love it . It hooked my attention right away . Lovee it dear . Aww . Heartbreak . Wow . I love the emotion and the realness in your words . Some would say that [You're tearing me apart.] is cliche , and I do not think that it is . You used it in the PERFECT spot . My favorite style of writing as well . Hehe . One thing that I didn ' t like was there were some places where I would of taken or added a few filler words . I won ' t point anything out because it ' s one of those things where it ' s good without or with . Overall an amazing first stanza :]]

Second Stanza : You use wonderful words in the first sentence . The good thing about this certain " style " I suppose is that it is almost like a conversation . A one sided conversation anyways and it thrives on sarcasm . And you go a good job at it as well . Again , your emotion is so raw and real that like all your other work I can relate tremendously [ sp ] I love your last three or so lines .
One mistake though -

remorse at the point in time
^^
Should be ; at that point in time . Not the . Atleast thats what I think . Little mistake though . Otherwise , a great stanza dear .

Third Stanza : Yay the wrinkled shirt stuff is back again . I also love your storyline . You keep is smooth and on track but you do not repeat it all over and make it sloppy . I think this stanza said a lot about you as a person . Being strong but still vulnerable to the heartache of love . I didn ' t quite understand the heart of memories thing . It confused me a lot . But other than that great stanza babe . . .

Oh and another thing , your punctuation . You use it strongly . Lovee it Steph . And the last two lines were so sad . Aww . But overall a great poem . Few mistakes and a true joy to read . 5 . 5

Amber .

"I'm standing here with a wrinkled shirt and rolled up jeans, but please don't display sympathy on your face for my behalf. Because all the useless words you throw my way won't save me, nor will it ease the guilt bubbling around inside my bruised heart. [You're tearing me apart.]"
-I like the idea of using a crinkled shirt and rolled up jeans to show a type of pain at not being smoothed out. I also liked that guilt was bubbling as if burning in your heart.

"My knees are scarred from falling, but my heart is use to this infinite feeling. That feeling of falling head over heels, head over heels in love with you. But it doesn't matter, does it? No, it never will...because I betrayed you and I betrayed you without a touch of remorse at the point in time. But dear, I swear, I feel the burn now. [You're burning me with this silence.]"
-I absolutely fell for the first sentence. From falling too many times scars now show on your knees, brillant thought. Also how you didn't feel the burning until later, it shows your feelings changed once you did this something of betrayl[I don't know if I spelt that correctly]
"Time is still passing and I still haven't made time to iron my wrinkled shirt or straighten out my jeans. And I can still feel my knees aching and my heart thumping, but I won't let go. No, I won't. And there's nothing more that this world can scream at me to make me unclench my heart of memories."
-After this time you still feel the aches and pain and the world cannot help you forget. It is so beautiful.

"You were my world and I broke you. And for that, I swear that you deserve everything I can ever give to you and I deserve... nothing. "
-These last two sentences just are filled with everything that you possibly could imagine. Regret, sadness, pain. I loved this poem 5/5