Sumthing more to learn ..... n written in a amazing way..

Keep it up... u r writes r too good..

Best wishz... Karan

The first line.
Maybe you could change that to
Crowing bird[s] greeting the first [rays]
So it rhymes more with display.

Hmm...
Oh.
I just realize this was in the nature section.

I was trying to find a deeper meaning for it all.
But I couldn't find one.
I was thinking.
This is just, well, discriptive poetry.

Then I realize it was in the nature section.
It all made sense after that :]

Very nice poem. Beautiful word choices and imagery.
Take Care Cindy

I liked it, its different but good and very beautiful words, it makes a great meaning. keep it up 5/5

laura

Very interesting write. i'n not a big fan of...whatever you wanna call it "super structured poems" but i felt you did a great job on this, the first four lines drew me in immediately..just awesome. ...i got a little lost in the middle but i thought the ending made up for it, all in all, a very solid, well crafted poem. great job...i don't like to criticize, it's not in my nature, i believe in letting the poet do his/her own thing and letting the reader take out of it what they get, but... the one thing i was wishing for in this, was just a little more emotion...but again, it's YOUR poem, not mine, and you did a kick ass job regardless!! good job!
john

For a newly attempt poem it was good.. i was actually trying to look for a deeper meaning but then it seems like there's none (correct me if i'm right). It was really nice piece that portrays a peaceful to picture of nature..

It's an interesting write. I've never seen anyone attempt this style before, so I can't really judge with a lot of experience but from what I can tell, you did a pretty good job. It's not amazingly stunning, but then I don't typically hold nature poems to a high prestige. Considering the strict rules of this style of poem, you did amazing with creating the image of dawn to dusk with a nice choice of words.

I don't know what else to say, but I wouldn't correct or change anything, really :)
..__MiNDYY

I love how you attempt different styles, this poem was more like a painting to me which with each word you wrote a little more showed 5/5

Bit confusing, but that may be coz im a dumb blonde. but still good.
take care .x.stace.x.

This is very nice. Poems of nature always grab me, and you've done well both with rhyme and imagery

First attempt and the first success.
Well done. YOu have an amazing
way with your words. Keep up the
wonderful work.
You are now one of my favorites.
<3Tay
5/5

A very beautiful and touching piece of poetry. i liked the way you worded it and how it flowed so very wel together

5/5

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

For the format that you put it into, I thought it was a very intriguing read. I can tell that you put a lot of thought into this piece. Your imagery was great and your rhymes never seemed forced. Excellent work!

Wow! this is a great poem. full of vision and meaning. It really captivated me. thanks!

Formed poetry is really beautiful and this piece has just proven that...you really are great with these forms. This one is a visual treat! Beautiful and calming.