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by Gabba Gabba Hey May 23, 2008 category : Love, romance / lasting love
The Moon disappears each night as the sun moves up in the sky is she frightened of the change or merely skidding of her lost lover? As the sun moves up in the sky the bashfull moon closes her eyes Merely skiddish of her lost love she retreats into herself The bashful moon closes her eyes as her friends, the stars, try to comfort her she retreats into herself. a total eclipse of her hope Her friends, the stars, try to comfort her she can no longer hear them a total eclipse of her hope as the sun shows off to spite her She can no longer hear them as a tear slips down her face the sun shows off to spite her all she does is wait for night As a tear slips down her face the sun stops his parading all she does is wait for ngith while he sits, sad and ashamed The stops his parading and spreads his rays to comfort her while he sits sad and ashamed she looks up in shock Spreads his rays to comfort her they're joined hand in hand she looks up in shock love between polar opposites, hope is there They're joined hand in hand love between polar opposites, hope is there.
by rrrrrrr
I believe this is a pantoum, but it is still wonderfully written.
by claire
This is such a cool metaphor its brilliant the way you made the moon the girl and the sun the guy, and her being shocked when he reaches out to her - I love all the ideas!