hi, I like your poem a lot..
You have talent..
Please check out my poems and comment and rate.. It would mean a lot to me..=)

I gave you a 5-

Hugs to you

Hey
Your pretty good for someone so young. Try rhyming every 2nd line instead of every line. I think it would really improve the way you write. But over all i liked it. you should also try writing some unrhyming poetry, it's harder to write but it all the lines fit together better. Don't be offended by the creative critisism, It was a pretty good poem
Luv,

-Blue ^_~