[As] Night begins to flourish
You should add that.
It just sounds better.

Merely silhouette of the dead land
You mean merely [a] silhouette?
Or silhouette[s]

?

Other than that.
I thought this poem was pretty choppy.

I'll end the note with,
You've got some symbols on your ending.

The most detailed sun set ever, lol, i liked it

This poem has an outstanding flow that I envy This dark poem hit its mark

I like this piece from the beginning to the end. you have great choice of words and you portrayed very original, vivid imagery within every line. I could clearly imagine whole piece unfolding in my mind which was truly amazing. Just one suggestion: Maybe you need more captivating title which will suit this piece better, something like "Nocturnal Images" or "Flourish Obscurity"... I just think that this piece is amazing and that it needs more unique title.
All in all, I enjoyed in your descriptions within this poem. You managed to say so much within just eight lines which is truly impressive.
Powerful write.

5/5 from me

Excellently written... short and straight... very well done...
the imagery and the metaphors used are simply amazing...

'Deafening silence' - My fav words...

good work..

Wow great poem of yours huh

I love this poem..when I read it I see the sunset. Outstanding job!

A beautifully described sunset. it sent shivers down my spine. it was a bit short, but i still really liked it

5/5

amazingly penned

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Sweet short poem,and i see during my reading your poems that you got special talent and imagination,you paint every word with feeling color and i love this styel,5/5

You described everything so beautifully! I can honestly say that you're a good poet! I liked this poem alot. Great job. 5/5

You have a way of making short poems so powerful
the first sentence made me think it would be happy, but it had a twist
well done

I like it...... The vOcab and usage of wOrds is really goOd and perfectly bulid up a strOng imagery.

``Merel a silhouette of the dead land
--> Shouldn't it be 'MerelY...'?

DOn't really knOw what mOre tO say. I just like it. :)

5/5