Comments : Summer Day

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Gosh, Aaron...

    I wish I could be in that poem and live it:)
    You have written this in such a way I could see it all in front of me.

    Take care,

    Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Trying to hold on

    Crystal clear, fun style to read, I enjoyed the rhythm you gave and how you have worded and layed out these words, it worked perfectly, magic and warming to read, congratulations I love the depth you give in your pieces and enjoyed this one so much.
    Wonderful piece, 5/5, was a lovely messege

  • 16 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Aaron,
    What a wonderful time of year. I thouroughly enjoy it. I think you have done a great job of bringing the joys of summer to poetic form. In my opinion I would eliminate the repetition of the back to back words.
    ^^Colorful colors illuminate the sky
    Possibly change the first word to Vibrant, bright or some other descriptive word for colors.
    Enjoy your summer dear. Have a great one.
    Kay

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Waking to the morning sun
    Rays of joy streak through the window
    Colorful colors illuminate the sky
    The warmth of summer has arrived"

    My favorite lines, you sure brought such happiness and joy in this write, and I could see this whole scene going on in my mind. Great work, really thought this one was awesome! Keep writing, always and forever...