I really loved this poem loni, it is very touching and heartbreaking.It was deeply emotional.
well done 5\5

Good job!

You're a pretty good writer for being only 15. I'm not a huge fan of the repeated phrase, but I can't really criticize it because I do it too sometimes. It gets the point across though. It was a bitter sweet poem. It reminds me a lot of something in my life. You captured it pretty well! Keep up the good work!

-mo-