Comments : Forgetting You

  • 16 years ago

    by Britt

    Verry niice. i can soo relate to this poem! well done greatt job! anotherr favorite of minee. Lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Hannah Mhairi

    I love it, i dunno why i was just drawn ta this 1 first but u got me hooked on ur poems now!! :P

  • 16 years ago

    by BrOkEn HeArT

    Way to go. it has a great meaning to it. i like it!

  • 16 years ago

    by brokengirl

    Omgsh.. I love this poem.. Favoured it ;) Great Job =]

  • 16 years ago

    by brokengirl

    Love it :P
    Favoured it ;P

  • I really love this poem...I wish I can forget him :[
    Anyway,great job...
    Keep writing :]

  • 16 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    VERY GOOD POEM I CAN RELATE TO HAVING THE SAME FEELINGS TOWARDS A EX OF MINE IT'S LIKE YOU SAY THINGS BUT DEEP DOWN YOU REALLY DON'T MEAN THEM CAUSE YOU STILL HAVE FEELINGS FOR THEM, GREAT JOB!

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    "Sure I'll forget you
    And pretend you're not around
    And you better believe
    I'll never think of you
    And how great you made me feel
    when I was down"

    -- I liked this as an opening. It explained the title right away, which I like. Howeverrrr.. I think you should make all of your stanza's the same length. But that's just me being picky. Hahah.

    "I'll never again look
    into your eyes
    And see all the feelings
    your love defies "

    -- Oh, my! I love love love these rhymes! Beautiful word choice, as well.

    "Oh don't worry
    I won't think of how
    wonderful you are
    Because I know your only
    Just a long-gone star"

    -- Comma after "Oh". I think you should remove "Just" in the last line. Also, "your" should be "you're".

    *Overall, I loved it. I liked the emotion, and the word choice. The flow was good, too. Great job on this.

    Five out of five. [5/5]

    ``Briana