I liked your interpreation and personification of time, but i think that time could be female also.

We are the slaves of time is my fave line. a perfect ending. i disagree with your interpretation of the solidity of time when its actually a fabrication of man to create order but the piece itself is very nice

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I feel you could have made this a little more elaborate. While it had depth, it lacked a certain dimension of thought that I picked up on very quickly. Keep writing, you'll get better