There is a lot to be said about dark passion and you seem to have said it in this masterpiece

The flow was stunning
this made the reader feel your sadness
the snake that is you
forever in the dark
wraps tighter around me
crushing my heart
--fav. part
deserves a 5/5

I liked that this was a dark piece but it was under the love category! THat is awesome! I loved like Michael said, the dark passion behind this piece...very different. Well done!

I could easily feel the emotions.. there seems to be alot about people and this "dark" part of love, but not many people can word it so perfectly. This was a great piece of work and I liked it alot :D

I loved this all the way through, loved the flow, loved it all!
5/5

Good flow, and kept me interested right to the end. A nice write!