Wow very very long read
but you did a great job
the structure was pretty good babe
one thing: make the paragraphs into stanzas its easier for the reader to keep focus that way
overall really good job : ) 5/5<33

Wow... please don't die.... wow this is just powerful, and awsome, this piece makes you think alot makes you judge yourself, its kind of condemning in a brilliant way though...

Wait.....wait.....why am I shaking and crying??

Is. is it really hurting me this much??

^^ i loved this part it made the beginning...

Are you still there? I beat your trembling and wondering why you did nothing to save my life.

^^ loved that too its a very... knowing part...

If you still doubt it all listen to this::

When the Nazis came for the communists,
I remained silent;
I was not a communist.
When they locked up the social democrates,
I remained silent;
I was not a social democrat.
When they came for the trade unionist,
I did not speak out;
I was not a trade unionist.
When they came for the Jews,
I remained silent;
I wasn't a Jew.
When they came for me,
there was no one left to speak out. (Martin Niemller)

^^ thats great so many examples... you turned it so it know longer seems to be just about you now its international... like i said great piece... only one thing i think you should put it in stanzas but then again that is just me... 5/5 GREAT JOB

Very powerful.. Nice Job.. I loved it.. long yet was interesting to read.. so great job!! nd thanks for the comment!!..

This poem is more like a Poe. sits in a dark room, writting his fate for life or death, predicting every little thing that comes to past, only worried that his thought will come true. Will my lover die tonight for the angels in heaven are jelious of me. for they want my Anna Bell Lee. lol. you are an awsom poet. you are a Poe in my book.

OMG!!!!u r am amazing writer i love all of your stuff how did you get so good i love it

kiwi

Wow that was really long but im glas i read it
i really liked it
i understand where ur coming from
great job

Wow that was really long but im glas i read it
i really liked it
i understand where ur coming from
great job

Woah. This is really powerful. Long read, but worth it. I really liked this write. relatable piece. Nice work. 5/5