Excellent poem. There's a good beat and rhythm throught the entire poem, and the message it sends is bold and awe-inspiring.

Stanza 1:
"My words would heal, and would not be forgotten"
Dreams so bold... Not fame or wealth, but to go down in history as a saint, a Pure One. Simple line, but strong.
"Far above the forbidden fruit that made us all so rotten"
Ah, why rotten? Are there no other rhymes? It's like singing a hymn and throwing in a piece of slang at the end. At worst, you could change forgotten from the previous, line, but it fits so well...

Stanza 2:
"Once I welded my sword, the evil one would yield
No dark force could harm me, or get past my shield"
A little weak there, with "evil one" and "get past". Those words are too normal for poems like these. Think big, bold, strong.

Stanza 3: Addition of feet? Odd, but passes reasonably.
"My motto would be trust the Creator, and do not be afraid"
Quotation marks would be useful here. Is it " trust the Creator" or "trust the Creator, and do not be afraid"?
"Peace will come to those who believe, we will have it made"
Weak ending, after the comma. Words that would fit well and rhyme with crusade might be aide, blade, prayed, crusade, etc

I probably only pointed out bad points, but I really appreciated this poem. It's honestly a good piece of work, both in structure and in the poem itself.

Wonderful write... so beautifully expressed..

'My Lord the prince of peace has reined for two thousand years
It would be my task to conquer demons, and cast out all fears
My motto would be trust the Creator, and do not be afraid
Peace will come to those who believe, we will have it made '

^^ i love this stanza... because of the optimistic element present in it... it gives a hope that peace will conquer again...

very well written..

keep writing..

I like this piece a lot from the beginning to the end. The message is good and the topic is very original, I've never read something like this before. Your choice of words is truly great along with the flow that you created in every stanza. Whole poem has some serene tone and beautiful atmosphere which is deeply enjoyable. I think that you did amazing job with rhymes, too. Also, whole piece holds very vivid descriptions, it took me on a wonderful poetic journey. I've read whole piece twice but I still can't pick my favorite lines, there are too many great ones.
Fantastic job, Michael.
5/5 from me

Wow that is strong faith you have, it was a very nice poem and hit me a little even though im athiest nice poem 5/5

Wow, this is absolutely amazing! I admire your work here, it just gives out a strong message and shows you have such great faith. You expressed your thoughts so perfectly and just truely amazed me as you did other readers. I have never read anything like this, and I am so glad you shared this with us. Wonderful job, and keep writing! :)

Loved the flow...the rhyme helped understand and paint a mental image....great write! ^_^

My motto would be trust the Creator, and do not be afraid
Peace will come to those who believe, we will have it made
--buetiful motto

As a messenger of God, what a picture I could paint
My words would heal,
-- i love this part
lovely poem 5/5

This poem is so Heavenly!!
haha.. I like it..
5/5 indeed!