Do you ever have your band sing your poems? Cause they'd be amazing lyrics...and I know you know that cause you said you write to a beat :P This is great dear sir!
'well I realize when life comes with a price,
then nothing really seems as expensive as,
the cuts and the bruises gained from a fight,
with your enemies and fears all through the night.'
This was a really good choice for lines to repeat, very well written, good point, and it's well recieved!
'well this goes out to you, my love,
so give me a kiss because this feelig lingers.'
I like this line especially. Dunno why!
another great job!