Another crack in my heart

by waiting 4 some1   May 27, 2008


Do you think I am sitting silently
waiting to hear "I apologize"?
Do you think
I am eager to hear another one of your lies?
NO, I am not expecting anything
Please wake up and realize
You are just like the others
Another copy of the bad guys

One word can describe You
No need to explore
No need to dive deep
It's obvious on the shore
"Selfish" describes you
No need for more
If heartless is an item
Then you are the core

I didn't mind being an old jar
If you would be a beautiful vase
I didn't mind being the last
Since you would be the first
I tried my best
In order to keep the smile upon your face
I fought to keep you the winner
Because you see life as a race

I don't know what's in your mind
And how far your dreams can reach
Maybe you are aiming for the ocean
Because you already have passed the beach
Maybe you don't know, the energy of you dreams
And how much blood do they leech
But what I really worry about is in order to fulfill your dreams
Will I be able to afford the drops you need to fulfill each?

note: the last stanza was a little bit long sorry for that

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  • 16 years ago

    by LoveTear

    Assalamo aleikom, it's really amazing ur poem that's touching ur heart (of course 4d one has been n this situation)
    Mabrouk ! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by LoveTear

    Assalamo aleikom, it's really amazing ur poem that's touching ur heart (of course 4d one has been n this situation)
    Mabrouk ! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Scott C

    Omg I positivley loved this poem.
    Besides it's great flow I could really relate to it.
    Great job.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Goodbye

    Do you think I am sitting silently
    waiting for you to apologize?
    Do you think
    I am eager to hear another one of your lies?
    NO, I am not expecting anything
    Please wake up and realize
    You are just like the others
    Another copy of the bad guys
    =>I like this stanza. The begin is good. I imagine in my end an empty room and male's voice speaking me this words with angry straight face.

    One word can describe You
    No need to explore
    No need to dive deep
    It's obvious on the shore
    "Selfish" describes you
    No need for more
    If heartless is an item
    Then you are its core
    => I think 4 last lines of this stanza are very well-written. I specially like the way you say "If heartless is an item
    Then you are its core "

    I didn't mind being an old jar
    If you would be a beautiful vase
    I didn't mind being the last
    Since you would be the first
    I tried my best
    In order to keep the smile upon your face
    I fought to keep you the winner
    Because you see life as a race
    => I know the feeling...when your friends are ALWAYS having like a competition who did best about something. They are always bragging about what they have done. Maybe you did sometimes better but you did not want to upset them or make them feel sad and you did not told... But they never really understand why you let the to win that stupid computer game you were playing or let them shine about telling others how cool they are.

    I don't know what's in your mind
    And how far your dreams can reach
    Maybe you are aiming for the ocean
    Because you already have passed the beach
    Maybe you don't know, the energy of you dreams
    And how much blood do they leech
    but what I really worry about is in order to fulfill your dreams
    Will I be able to afford the drops you need to fulfill each?
    => The last lines were the ending leaves an open question...Will I be able to afford the drops ou need to fulfill each? Yes...result is...another crack in your heart...

    I think this poem is extremely well-written and you have put so much real feelings and described everything so no reader will stay cold. This is another amazing poem from Adel

  • 16 years ago

    by Meme

    The last stanza was my favorite
    gd job again bro

    ~gIrL~