Cast-away

Aww..this was really sad :(....good job tho!
5/5
Aly

This makes me....feel it. I feel like I feel it. I love your use of !'s in your writing, it's unusual now-a-days and really adds something to your writing. I like it a lot.

And I'm sorry :(

Gawd..this is really sad ..loved the part where u said
"it's just my lack of understanding,
that will cause me pain,"
well said ...nice piece king.

There was a spark of excitement,
as I read my mail,
she left insurances of more.
it's just my lack of understanding,
that will cause me pain,
and now my heart feels sore.
=>I can relate to this...good begin.

cause I'm so lonely,
and I'm so tired,
so please attract me,
snatch me away.
=> Yes, I know the feeling being alone...needing the breeze of Luv

make me smile,
make me cry,
make me laugh,
just make me high.
=> You just want to be alive...no matter crying or laughing...it is being alive, having emotion you lack of.

I can't get hurt,
I can't get hurt.
=>Well...when you don't have expectation and you don't care if you cry or laugh as long as you feel...yes.

why did you give me,
what you thought I desire?
when you know I'm lonely,
when you know I'm lost.

why did you take me,
when you're gonna reject me?
you know I'm ready for it,
you know I'll make you whole
=> Yes, love should be mutual...and usually...when lover open his arms the other person will also...feelings are exchanged...And if there is no responding..they will be gone soon...

you pleasure me,
I pleasure you,
we could have gone the distance.

you stare at me,
I stare at you,
I'm the hero of the hour.

and then a cast-away!
next I'm a cast away!
=> This is brilliant...The truth is that person who we love...he can make us feel we are the hero of the hour... So true.. And then...cast-away....autsch...

there was the feeling of being,
let down again,
watch as my history,
repeats itself,
and so the waiting goes on.
=> Awww... :/ I feel so sad...first you had these excitement feelings...and then...let down..