The Last Resort.

Good poem.

i like how you started it off.. it pulled me in.. but near the middle i think the flow was a bit rocky. other than that you ended it nicely.

great job. 5/5

Giving up is the last thing in her mind.
But, it's her last resort.
`Ooh! I love the opening lines! But I feel like it should be "on" instead of "in." -shrugs. It makes more sense to me; but it's your poem :) I adore the desperation displayed in these two simple lines. I've been at that point before, and I think you portrayed it nicely.

She never believed that one day she'd follow this path,
But nothing has made sense ever since she set eyes on you.
`I can totally relate. Here, I want to change the word "set" to "laid" but then that's pretty overused, so I don't really know O_O I liked these lines too, though.

but..she was wrong.
`The periods are unnecessary, and provide a pause that just distorts the flow.

She wants to start all over,
And forget you completely.
`Lines are too short compared to the rest of the piece -- it puts a dent in the flow. Maybe make one of the lines longer?

The move that could have potentially made everything make more sense.
`make + made ... similar words because one's just a different verb tense. It was like your repitition in the previous poem I commented that consisted of a constant use of dream.

Grawr' ... You used "she" A LOT. It took away from the piece, and the long, long, extending lines as the piece continues disturbs the flow quite a bit. I loved the emotion behind this -- but I wish you'd expand your vocabulary. Grab a thesaurus and use different words! It'll create a more vibrant ambiance AND will create great diction -- which leads to a stunning poem. Go over this, and edit it. Because I know this can grow into something amazingly flawless.
..__MiNDYY

I think you used the word "she" waayy too much. It truly throws off the flow and makes it harder to read. I liked your meaning behind this but again you repeated your thoughts with different words throughout the whole poem. I also suggest you expand on your vocabulary because it will elevate your poems to a whole different level making it even more enjoyable to read. Read over this one and make some slight revisions and it will be perfect.

Good job :]