Good job :]

I think you used the word "she" waayy too much. It truly throws off the flow and makes it harder to read. I liked your meaning behind this but again you repeated your thoughts with different words throughout the whole poem. I also suggest you expand on your vocabulary because it will elevate your poems to a whole different level making it even more enjoyable to read. Read over this one and make some slight revisions and it will be perfect.

Giving up is the last thing in her mind.
But, it's her last resort.
`Ooh! I love the opening lines! But I feel like it should be "on" instead of "in." -shrugs. It makes more sense to me; but it's your poem :) I adore the desperation displayed in these two simple lines. I've been at that point before, and I think you portrayed it nicely.

She never believed that one day she'd follow this path,
But nothing has made sense ever since she set eyes on you.
`I can totally relate. Here, I want to change the word "set" to "laid" but then that's pretty overused, so I don't really know O_O I liked these lines too, though.

but..she was wrong.
`The periods are unnecessary, and provide a pause that just distorts the flow.

She wants to start all over,
And forget you completely.
`Lines are too short compared to the rest of the piece -- it puts a dent in the flow. Maybe make one of the lines longer?

The move that could have potentially made everything make more sense.
`make + made ... similar words because one's just a different verb tense. It was like your repitition in the previous poem I commented that consisted of a constant use of dream.

Grawr' ... You used "she" A LOT. It took away from the piece, and the long, long, extending lines as the piece continues disturbs the flow quite a bit. I loved the emotion behind this -- but I wish you'd expand your vocabulary. Grab a thesaurus and use different words! It'll create a more vibrant ambiance AND will create great diction -- which leads to a stunning poem. Go over this, and edit it. Because I know this can grow into something amazingly flawless.
..__MiNDYY

Good poem.

i like how you started it off.. it pulled me in.. but near the middle i think the flow was a bit rocky. other than that you ended it nicely.

great job. 5/5