"I�ll help you escape the torture,"
-I'll showed up a little weird. I don' tknow if there is anyway you can change that.

Overall, excellent write. Emotions are clear. The feeling that you want to be loved. Excellent piece. I have nothing else to say. No flaws whatsoever. The rhyme scheme made your poem flow beautifully. You stuck with it. 5/5

Very very well written.
It flowed wonderfully and didnt seem forced at all.
The emotion was strong and well felt.
keep up the great work.