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by reJoyce May 29, 2008 category : Love, romance / desired love
Driving at night He remembers the dream The girl, she stopped and kissed him What did it mean? Perplexed and in awe Epitomized the emotion So he committed this to memory And continued going through the motions Stopping at green lights These thoughts reenter his mind A peaceful lack of focus An easy way to pass the time Why did she have to kiss him When a simple touch lifts him off the ground?! The joy it overwhelmed him Sent his head spinning round and round So he activates the autopilot And cranks the volume loud He's slowly zoning out Drowning in the sound The lyrics are all he hears While the music surrounds and fills the space His thoughts slowly scatter And everything dissipates But these hopeful thoughts Make him feel so dumb Cause they're just fantasy created By his imagination And he's asleep at the wheel While the stereo sings He can't help that all he sees Are happy endings.
by eehcuhhhz
You should watch the syllable counts in here. Actually, Your rhyming seemed kind of forced. Okay. I would have loved to see what that person was seeing while he was driving at night. For example, at the beginning, You could've mentioned The air, how it blows, Or something weird like that. It would make it more realistic. I thought the story was pretty good. It made me smirk in an unlady like way. :p