You should watch the syllable counts in here.

Actually,
Your rhyming seemed kind of forced.

Okay.
I would have loved to see what that person was seeing while he was driving at night.

For example, at the beginning,
You could've mentioned
The air, how it blows,
Or something weird like that.

It would make it more realistic.

I thought the story was pretty good.
It made me smirk in an unlady like way.

:p