Comments : Karma Shoes

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Your imagery is amazing...and it seems surreal and perfect, even if it is reality..just the way its used.
    I like the 'shoes' metaphor type-thing, it's helpful. Another beautiful poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Goodbye

    I'm right here in a meadow,
    two hours from my home,
    and I lay my body down,
    right next to a green stone,
    and I fill my tired head,
    with all that concerns me,
    think about the girl,
    and how her eyes burned me.
    => This is nice stanza. It paints an image about summer...and Scandinavia.. (OMG I love Scnadinavian summer!!!) I can smell already the green a little bit wet grass...fresh air..awwww.. Laying down and thinking about our life...Sky is the limit..

    because I do believe it's true,
    that good karma will come for you,
    if you want it to feel smooth,
    you better follow through.
    => Me too, I believe in Karma's law. :)

    if you want it feel smooth,
    you better follow through.

    lately my head's a mess,
    I can't get things done,
    I'm shaking at the knees,
    when I think about a chance blown,
    but I hope there's still a chance,
    to watch your burning eyes,
    as I ask you to dream,
    and stop with all your lies.
    => Yes, love...broken heart feelings.. some drama going on.. She lied to you...but you love her and still want a change...You see it is precious and you don't wanna loose your rainbow.

    because I do believe it's true,
    that good karma will come for you,
    if you want a pair of brand new shoes,
    you better follow through.
    => Yes, new pair of shoes...no bad karma on them.. New change.. but once you step on them must be VERY careful because we can not change our shoes every five minutes..And karma shoes...even less.. We must be washed clean before stepping in karma shoes...

    if you want a pair of brand new shoes,
    you better follow through.

    because islands may pass away,
    once we mess with the world today,
    and if you want me to kiss your lips,
    you better follow through.
    => Very nice unique thoughtful poem about life and love and karma shoes ;) Well done. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    I love this poem- it's so refreshing the way it feels simple and honest, and it's real poetry (as in not tacky or fake or cliche) at the same time =)

  • 16 years ago

    by Bare My Paradox

    Its simple, and its true for me I believe in Karma too

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    Wow ...amazing ! well written and beautifully penned 5/5
    You know this poem can be a great song ...!

  • 16 years ago

    by neo

    A Poetic GOD miss ya love :)