Lol. This made me think, I WANT A PERFECT WORLD, DANGIT!!!! ^.^

Why can't the one person that gives you butterflies,
the one that makes you forget your own name
Be so overwhelmed by you
like you are by them?

^^ This is just so realistic. I don't fall for guys a lot. and the one i finally fall for...it doesn't matter. and it HURTS. a lot. so that was my favorite stanza.

Ichi, this poem is sweet. It's got undertones of longing in it...you can tell there's a reason that you wish the world would be this way, but it's not directly stated. *hugs* good job.

Oh wow, Ichi! This was a very beautiful poem and I loved every single line. You actually used a lot of questions that I ask myself about love every single day. And not only myself, but I'm sure many other people ask themselves the same thing. Which makes this poem even more wonderful. It's relatable. But it's really nice you brought it to our attention. Maybe it'll make the people that are like this really think about the things they're doing.

Why does love have to come with so much pain?
When it can't just wash away with the rain?

^ My most favorite lines out of the entire piece. I just thought about heartbreak and tears being washed away and just totally agree 101%. Your vocabulary was very nice and the flow was pretty good. Great job, my dear. Keep writing.. because you just keep getting better at it. Love you. 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Wow. you took the words right out of my mouth. this poem is so so true. i kno exactly wat you mean. it was beautiful. job well done 5/5.

by the way i love anime too!!

-Ashlei.

I like how you analyze the word love. Yeah love it can makes us happy & at the same time makes us sad. Seems to me that this was penned down inspired by ur past miseries with relationship. Yeah Be it a guy or a gal.. both us can be used like a toy by the other party.But that again it does mean that we can't fall in love again.Greatly written

Excellent Job
5/5