From what I comprehend, this is about faith and religion? If it is, oh, my. You're in for a very short, unhelpful comment because when it comes to poems like this, my mind absolutely BLANKS.

Pride and anger needs to pierce through.
`I feel like you should take out the "s" in needs. It just sounds better.

Okay, I'm at the second stanza now. I think I get what you're getting at ... but I can't find the words to really explain what I'm thinking. Your flow and wording is continuously great tho :)

Warring to resolve which crowd is right;
`For some reason, my mind just totally transitioned to thinking about society and interpreting this (by itself) as teenagers going through all that stupid drama and trying to find themselves -- figuring out whether they want the popular crowd or their real but "loser" friends more ("which crowd is right"). Totally random, but whatever xD

Searching answers that forms the heavens,
`Here, I think you should take out the "s" in forms, too. But I don't know if it would make a difference -- nor how it would sound to you, since it's your poem and all.

I actually liked the third stanza (probably because it's the only one I think I understand the most) a lot more than the first two. The first two provide visuals -- great imagery, and create an atmosphere to the piece. This stanza however, digs into a deeper meaning of life and death.

Blessed lands sparkle with disrespect;
`Oooh, nice diction here. "sparkle with disrepect" -- it's an ironic image for me. And I love irony :)

So overall, your piece's flow never faltered. Your careful choice of diction was constant and effective -- and the ending wrapped it out with a sort of mysterious, open question in the air. And the ending line is teeming with potency. It's an effective sentence.

Despite that I couldn't fully comprehend it, I enjoyed it.
Nicely done.
..__MiNDYY

First of all, thank you for my comment. I took your advice to heart.

Wow, I loved this poem. It was a very powerful message. Is this about religion? If so, I can see all the descriptions and emotions. You definitely peaked my imagination.

Nice poem, really like it, keep up

Will this war ever end ? are we ever going to live together in peace and harmony ? Why are we so divided ? what changed the world ? .... Sorry I got a little carried away ... But this poem of yours triggered something in me. Any way 5/5

Yes, very well done. It is so true the hipocracy involved in holy wars. This was a very powerful write and i totally agree with what you are speaking of. thanks for your comment on my dissipate poem and i would love if you read more of my works and i will happily return the favor. keep writing.

This poem makes a very valid point about the abuses that misguided religious fanaticisms have caused if mankind sought the truth with the same persistence the world could live in peace, at least from a mystic point of view. Great poem, I have no criticisms

This poem is nice
keep the good job!
5/5

A powerful poem about religion. i didn't quite get anything that may have been in between the lines but i enjoyed the read as it was different to what i usually read. i think it flowed well, rhymed brilliantly and was worded and penned fantasticly

5/5

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~