Nothing Left to Say

by Lori   May 31, 2008


After all you've cost
You hurt me again
Feelings tossed
I've lost my best friend

Everything that mattered
Doesn't now cross your mind
Now that it's my love you've shattered
You've put me in a reckless bind

Not only did you ruin me
You've paid the price as well
You're now nothing but what they made you
As everyone sees your wrists swell

Is stabbing a needle in your arm really worth it all?
Does it really ease the pain that made your life fall?

These are the questions I ask of you
So I can know the reasons of what you do

You could've been a someone, you could have had a life
But that night you still took your anger out on the knife

And on that knife
Lies your blood so red and divine
Oh why did you have to ruin your life?
Why did you have to ruin mine?

My tears are only drained
Our lives are only washed away
The blood on your coffin is only stained
And there's nothing left to say

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  • 16 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    Emotion was somewhat there, but the flow was off at times. Still a good write. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by TravisInABottle

    I kind of liked this one. It shows the hurt a person can do to someone when they act on self-harming and mutilation.

    "Doesn't now cross your mind"

    ^This line doesn't sound right to me. Maybe if you change it to something like, "No longer crosses your mind." You don't have to, just a suggestion. :)

    "You could've been a someone, you could have had a life"

    ^I think you should take the 'a' out so that it reads, "You could've been someone, you could have had a life." Again, don't have to; just a suggestion. :))

    I liked how you began with four-lined stanzas, then switched to two-lined stanzas, and then went back to four-lined stanzas. It really gives your poem great structure.

    My honest critique: 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ForeverASickKid

    This is a amazing poem! it has so much feeling in it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsea King

    It was another amazing poem that you put your heart and soul in!! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by S R P

    I really enjoyed this poem. A lot of emotions behind the words, it really touched me.

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