This is amazing, its very good at getting the emotions in the words across to the reader. just, purely poetic in a sense.

Wow, well done on a great write. your use of words was amazing and shows rather than tells of all the hurt and pain. whilst reading this I cant even begin to tell you how many images rushed through my head so well done and keep up the good work darling!

Wow, it was a fantastic and wonderful poem and i reaaly like it.

I'll agree this poem is amazing, I believe it will one day it will change how someone thinks, someone thats in the similar position, well done 5/5

Wow completely breathtaking. verry cleverr, and so sad. you'ree an awesome writer. and i am speechless. lol greatt job! im so saving this to my favorites! lol

Your talented!
i felt what you wrote the message if that even makes any sence!
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This brought tears to my eyes. You're really talented. Great job!

Breath-taking yet very sad, it's on ma faves now all the stars in tha sky 4 it!!!

Way to go girl!!! i loved this poem! it was great! it was so well writin! keep it up.

Great poem, I especially liked the last two stanzas. I think the first stanza was your weakest, since the misdirection there might have a negative effect on your readers. Nobody wants to read yet another poem about a ditched friend.

"You've put me in a reckless bind"
Don't strain the rhyme. Ignore the rhyme scheme if you must, but don't make it sound forced.

"You could've been a someone, you could have had a life"
I like "a someone". It's so much more desperate, it sounds as if you're pleading, but you're too late to stop what had occured. WHich is true here.

"And on that knife
Lies your blood so red and divine
Oh why did you have to ruin your life?
Why did you have to ruin mine?"
Second line: a very specific, vivid detail. This is the strongest stanza in the poem, because everything reaches a peak but doesn't spill over. The repitition (3rd and 4th line) makes the peak that much unattainable. Wonderfully done.

"The blood on your coffin is only stained"
Another forced rhyming, this one less obvious than the other one. Still, I suggest you either ignore the rhyme scheme or, well, make better use of the rhymer.

"And there's nothing left to say "
Strong strong ending.

I loved this poem. Its so tragic...so emotional. So many people know someone like this. I loved every word, the flow was fantastic and I love how much of yourself you put in this.
<3Raych

Wow this was truly amazing. there was so much emotion and feeling in this poem! another great job :)

Wow diz iz deep n u waz ake it simple 2 understand u just let it all out n datz good love da poem ma fav

This was a wonderful piece of work!! yer a great writer, never quit writing! =]

Ohh.. this is really a dark poem... pain remorse sadness... it could be felt in ever stanza...

"My tears are only drained
Our lives are only washed away
The blood on your coffin is only stained
And there's nothing left to say "

^^ good ending...

"And there's nothing left to say" -- this really touched me...

keep writing..

Wow! How sad. That really touched me and made me cry! I loved the ending. It was really good. It feels so raw, like you really put your heart into this poem. I thouht it was amazing.

Wow! How sad. That really touched me and made me cry! I loved the ending. It was really good. It feels so raw, like you really put your heart into this poem. I thouht it was amazing.

I really enjoyed this poem. A lot of emotions behind the words, it really touched me.

It was another amazing poem that you put your heart and soul in!! 5/5

This is a amazing poem! it has so much feeling in it!