Excellent. i like the way you related it to an affair in a way. beautiful.

--TheGothicAlbino

Okay, I am a brutally honest person with everybody.This poem would have been so much better if you would have expanded your vocabulary and put more thought and emotions into it.The point of it was pretty good though.It just needs a little more time put into it.

-Amber

Im really sorry that its like that for you but this is a pretty good poem
your traditions are really good
and i really like the 5th and 6th stanza
good job
4/5/5
=)

Meant to say transitions not traditions