Dreaming of desire

Ooh, interesting. You send off a really pretty vibe in this piece. Your words sort of jump from the page, but just slightly. Enough to make the reader continue, but it's not completely overwhelming. From what I can tell, you have this sort of ... uniqueness to your writing, that really brings out a soft emotion from your words, but the emotions are potent enough to really grab you.

"Ben...Ben...Ben," envelop me with this phrase
`Very different, using the person's name. It brought through a great image.

Wanting you to want me just as bad.
`I didn't like the choice of "bad." It seems like such a childish choice -- change it, maybe to another word? Just a thought.

Other than that, I absolutely loved this piece.
..__MiNDYY

Another great piece from you. Of what I have read so far of yours, this secret, enigmatic love kind of vibe is really your thing. [: You have such a unique way of writing about common feelings; packs a punch. I really liked the line:

"You hide behind my eyes reminding me of yours,"

Clever! Nicely done. You're full of talent.

I love your spin at the end of the poem. I never saw it coming. You did an excellent job of leading the reader to believe that you were together and then the dawning of realization that you were dreaming of a time that may never come. Great job with your symbolism again and the metaphores were perfect as usual another great poem. (5/5)

I like how you made it real life and used the name of the one who makes you feel this way it was beautifully written...it was beautiful everywhere ... I like how you word things so differently than i would have put them...."The captivating eyes that suck away at my soul.
Capture me with those eyes that weaken me."
those lines made me weak =] haha i loved them...you have a very good vocabulary and use it wisely 5/5

"Your name echoes in and out of my random thoughts.
Like a pounding drum I repeat the sound,"
-Oh, I like the simile here. Great job. :]

"Ben...Ben...Ben," envelop me with this phrase"
-I found it interesting how you actually used the real person's name in here. :] I liked that!

"Nobody knows for you, are my secret."
-I would have worded this differently. Maybe.. "Nobody knows that you are my secret."
I don't think you need a comma there, just join them together and say what I said maybe? I don't know. Maybe I saw something you didn't? Just a suggestion. :)
I guess, the way you put it is alright. But that's just another way of saying it.

"Our emotions are stacked to a glorious peak."
I love how you worded this. :) Excellent word choice.. "glourious peak."

"The captivating eyes that suck away at my soul.
Capture me with those eyes that weaken me."
-I love the word captivating! XD Excellent word choice.

Wow, I enjoyed this piece so much. Everything was worded so nicely and the flow of this poem was beautiful. You used some really good words here. :) Nice word choice. I had soo many things I liked in this poem, and I only listed a few.. because I liked the entire poem lol.. anyway, 5/5