A beaten child

Not childish at all... Its annoying when people tell me that its not MY fault that my dad hits me or my mum drinks... But like it doesnt matter who's fault it is, It still sucks.
Hope things get better. The best quote piece of advice Ive ever been given is that "you can make your own family", so when you're able to move on, you can forget about the people who have hurt you! And yes i know, easier said than done. :) 5/5

Very deep and full of emotion im here for u! keep up the good work!

My dear, unfortunately, although very wrong, we hurt the ones we love most. no matter what, just remember, you can't blame yourself for unhealthy actions of others. i don't think we'll ever find true happiness because no such thing as perfection exists, but, we all have to believe we're here for a reason. after all life isn't so bad on those better rare days we get to experience. YOU are the strongest person you know. when you hit solid core you won't be able to go down any further except up and you'll finally be able to reach good happiness. i loved your poem, it his close to home for me. well penned. 5/5

This was far from chilidish. i loved this! it was deep ad emotional. filled with emotion in every line. you said what you felt, and got your message across well. it was lovely. it came from your heart, and that's a beautiful thing. job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

Girl i'm 43 yrs old and i could not find a childish word in the poem. I think every person on the planet wants the love and acceptance you seek. your poem was once more well written and expressed

Grant