Comments : SKipS oN thE RecorD

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    Your theme is interesting in comparing school/life to a skipping record. This could be a very good write. Your rhythm was difficult to pick up due, I feel, to structure and the way your rhyme scheme fluctuated or miss rhymed. Sometimes I think we are in a hurry to get our words/thoughts seen so we don't do enough proofing of our work.
    As always an opinion.