Comments : It crawled it's way from bethleham

  • 16 years ago

    by Prasad Baadkar

    A dark one that's what I felt nicely portrayed

  • 16 years ago

    by Austin

    Once again, various spelling errors and punctuation that needs to be fixed. I'll capitalize the errors in these lines and put parenthesis around what needs to be capped:

    "I crawled from the dust that hadn't settled.
    (b)ut like a beast it came from behind,
    (a)nd it pulled me back once again into;(semicolon is misused and not needed.)
    (a) war[-]zone which had stolen my life.

    (t)he sun hid from it, to afraid to show its face, (should be a period, not a comma)
    (i)t was the second coming as it dragged its way,
    (t)o be born again in Bethleham."