Nice write i liked the repeate in it, it helped and added to the poem alot. i like how much of ur emotin u put into and let out through it. u did a very good job ur an excellent writter keep it up 5/5 always
Kate~LSB23

Great poem I loved the stucture,Just one thing I think you should remove the word one completly except the last line of the third stanza.And that would add to the flow some.5/5